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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 and well being of citizens should be of utmost importance for any country. There should be free of
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 facilities available
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 every citizen of the nation, even though they don’t get these facilities
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, until they are getting treated and are living healthy it is fine.
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 will contribute to a better economic
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 a fundamental
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 of every
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, if the population of the country is healthy, they will contribute more towards the economic
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. Healthier people will be more productive and will be able to work more towards the advancement of the nation.
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, countries like USA, Canada, and Australia are more developed and have a better growing economy as compared to nations like South Africa, Nigeria, Bangladesh because the basic healthcare is covered by the former nations and people don’t have to worry about their wellbeing.
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, they focus more on work and better livelihood which leads to better economic
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, it is government’s duty to provide free
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 to everyone as it is their fundamental
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. People who are old aged, unemployed and poor cannot afford expensive basic
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 treatments, but
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 to live and lead a healthier life is their basic
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, governments collect taxes and they have a budget for every sector,
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 sector should be given higher budgets and people who are rich and pay taxes should contribute in lifting up and contribute in giving equal rights to their fellow citizens who cannot afford. To conclude,
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 essay discussed why every nation should have complementary
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 services as it leads to better economic
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 and it is
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 a basic
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 for everyone to live a healthy life.
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