Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Many individuals are of the opinion that
music
is a source of connecting people from different backgrounds and age groups with each other. I strongly agree with
this
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
, and will explain my reasoning in
this
essay.
Music
has been an
intergral
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
part of our society,
regarless
in spite of everything; without regard to drawbacks
regardless
of what heritage or country you belong to. It has the ability to stir up emotions in a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
way, and helps us relate to each others side of
story
Suggestion
the story
, regardless of the language barrier. There are have been plenty of occasions when the pop culture has defused a conflicting situation between the countries.
For example
, when Indo-Pak border tensions were escalated, many renowned musical bands and
celebraties
a widely known person
celebrities
stepped ahead from both nations and
successfuly
with success; in a successful manner
successfully
urged the head of states towards peace. Number of songs were produced from both sides encouraging the peace process and showed how similar in culture they both were.
This
ilustrates
clarify by giving an example of
illustrates
illustrate
the immense power
music
has over the general populace.
Also when
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Also, when
major
muscial
characterized by or capable of producing music
musical
muscle
bands perform in concerts, people from diverse age groups and cultures are there to attend it.
For Instance
, in an average Metallica concert,
attendess
a person who is present and participates in a meeting
attendees
from at least 23 nationalities are present, with the age group ranging from 12 to 75 years old!
This
also
depicts its power of bringing people together from diverse cultures.
However
, the power of
music
could
also
be misused. As it has the ability to generate emotions, many have used it to spread hate or false
propoganda
information that is spread for the purpose of promoting some cause
propaganda
among the civilians. Take the Syrian
government
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government, for
for example
. It has produced war mongering and hateful content against the neighbouring Kurds, urging its own population to take up arms in their ''Holy'' cause. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly believe that
music
has proved to be more beneficial for our society at large through bringing people together. Though, if used for the wrong purposes, can
also
instigate conflict.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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