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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The argument, about the importance of earning much money or working in a relaxing and stimulating place, has divided most of the population. Someone observes how an enjoyable job is better than a good salary for many reasons.
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, a comfortable atmosphere soars the level of hormones linked to physical well-being and reduces the stress,
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 in
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 way, the risk of medical issues drop dramatically.
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, you could hang out quicker, rather than earning a lot and being unhappy during your work. Others disagree and think how money and goods are better in their life. They say how economic troubles influence the level of joyousness in a common family.
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, sometimes, when you could buy an exclusive product or something you wish ardently, in that moment you are really plenty of joy. Another reason could be linked to reduce the level of stress when you return at home, because of facilities bought thank to cash. In my opinion the truth is in the middle: in fact, both economic problems and job condition are important, but at the same time nothing of them is fundamental. Life is both working and house,
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 you could get a job in a cute workplace, where your tasks are about something you approve and
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 trying to earn not few coins to avoid any troubles. In
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 way, you could live without stress on each part of the day. Summing up, the main idea of everything is researching happiness and the lack of issue, as a matter of fact the reasons between each group of people are similar, changing only the way to realize
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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