Nowadays, young people admire media and sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In
this
contemporary era,
although
celebrities do not act as role models, youth still praise them from the bottom of their hearts. In my opinion, I consider it as a negative development due to the following reasons.
To begin
with,
media
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the media
is
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are
the main culprit in promoting negative values among
audiance
a gathering of spectators or listeners at a (usually public) performance
audience
only to achieve high ratings to gain a huge profit.
In other words
, tv channels prefer to follow those media personalities which
invlove
connect closely and often incriminatingly
involve
themselves in
neativie
a person born in a particular place or country
native
activities.
For example
,
athlete
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an athlete
athletes
involved in drug abuse
always make
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always makes
highlights in international newspapers. Another reason is media personalities get a great deal of attention
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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