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Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

#lifestyles #parents #time #children #attention
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It is certainly true that nowadays parents are not able to give a proper
time
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 to their offsprings, in order to provide them a high standard of life. In my opinion, I consider that children are suffering a lot in terms of being ignored by their
parents compared
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parents, compared
 to
previous generation
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previous generations
the previous generation
, owing to these circumstances. One of the main reasons is the soaring
exepectations
belief about (or mental picture of) the future
expectations
 of family members. As a matter of fact, every young member of a family has different requirements.
For instance
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, the school going individuals
need
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needs
 electronic gadgets in their hands like the mobiles and the gaming consoles. In order to satisfy these requirements, parents dedicate extra
time
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 to their work to earn better remuneration.
Consequently
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, they are unable to instill
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 social values in the adolescents. Another obvious issue that why children do not enjoy full
time
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 company of
thier
of them or themselves
their
 parents is constantly rising inflation.
In other words
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, in
current scenerio both
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the current scenario, both
the current scenario both
current scenario both
current scenery both
 partners have to work hard for long hours to provide basic necessities of life
such
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 as shelter and food.
Previously prices
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Previously, prices
 were not as much as nowadays, so parents could have
time
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 to guide generation in the
pas
the time that has elapsed
past
phase
pass
 which seems impossible in these days. In conclusion, by analysing above viewpoints,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that in running behind luxury life, individuals are lacking in
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time which
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time, which
 is essential to rear up children in an efficient way.
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