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The Internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet? What are the best ways to solve them?

#internet #information
While it is believed that
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 has changed our life with the unique way of sharing and utilising,
however
, it has
also
 brought new challenges that were not earlier in existence.
This
 essay will discuss the
issuses
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issues
such
 as online thefts and the level it has been detrimental to many countries and shall
also
 throw light on the solutions which can eliminate the problems pertaining to the internet. Though
Internet
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the Internet
 has been one of the useful tools for
economical
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economic
 growth for many countries, it has been the reason for huge
monetrary
relating to or involving money
monetary
 losses in the country
aswell
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as well
. Hackers using
this
 platform to hack systems and harvest virus in the large corporation and government organisation. These companies still have
resources
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the resources
 to recover from their losses
however if
Accept comma addition
however, if
 the common man is trapped in all of
this
 he tend to lose more than anyone. It is researched that, 80% of the people daily get fake calls for submitting their credit card details,
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 20% give the details are
get
Suggestion
getting
 in trouble. Both the government and normal person loss is a loss which countries bare because of the Internet. To eradicate the problems of Internet right
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 is required, government bodies, big organisations, bank and community centres should work together
in
Suggestion
with
 the goal to
educated
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educate
 each and every person on
negative reprucations
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the negative repercussions
negative repercussions
 of
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
. Each person should do a word of mouth and spread the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 about these problems, they should
also
 keep a watch about who is calling them and about what. In conclusion, In order to have the right access of the Internet we should understand it deeply and should have knowledge about its negative impact and
then
 only we can enjoy it. .
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