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The flow chart below the recycling procedure of glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The process chart depicts the recycling progress of the
glass
bottles
 in different stages which are given in the chart. the first
step
 of recycling where the
glass
bottles
 collected
by
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in
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 public places and, the
bottles
 are different sorts of
colors
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colours
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 like green, brown and clear.
After
this
, the
glass
bottles
 sent by transportation for the third
step
 is classification. In
this
step
, metal
caps
 and plastic
caps
 are separated from
bottles
. Moving
further
, metal
caps
 and plastic
caps
send
Wrong verb form
are sent
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for
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to
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 the processing plant
and
Correct word choice
apply
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where the
glass
 is broken to convert into new ones.
On
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At
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further
Correct article usage
a further
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 stage, raw and
glass
material
Fix the agreement mistake
materials
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collected
Add a missing verb
were collected
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 that sent my car into the
glass
 factory.
This
 first process is
furnace
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a furnace
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 with a temperature of 1200
degree
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degrees
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 Celcius.
At
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In
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 the
last
 stage, the melted mixture
used
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is used
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 to make fresh
bottles
.
Overall
, all steps are necessary as, if one
step
 skips the process can spoil and,
in
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apply
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this
progress
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process
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 seven steps as well, present in a proper way.

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coherence cohesion
There are a number of issues present that impact coherence and cohesion. Logical structure within the essay is weak, with ideas not flowing seamlessly. Introducing clear, concise topic sentences and transitions would greatly improve the quality of the report. Supporting main points with details is crucial, and there is a general lack of detail throughout the essay.
task achievement
The task is addressed, yet not all parts are adequately covered. The essay lacks a clear comprehensive elaboration of ideas, and there is a shortage of relevant examples and specific details. Expanding on each stage of the process and clarifying the sequence would enhance the response.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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