Major companies use sports events to promote their product. Some people think it has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some multinational companies
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major sports events in order to advertise their products. Some people have positive opinion about
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, while others believe that there are certain downsides to
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. In my opinion, when multinational companies
sponsor
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sporting events, it is advantageous for them and the sports. When big companies
sponsor
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sports events, both the parties benefit. Sports events are promoted and people will be motivated to participate in various sports activities.
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to
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, talented youngsters may get inspired by the fame and money that accomplished players get and will want to pursue a career in sports. By showing their advertisements during these events, companies which
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people in general
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Thus organizations
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will get more profit. Many firms
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as Airtel, Idea and Pepsi funded many sports competitions and
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enhanced their publicity.
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, there are
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certain drawbacks to
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. It may deflect the attention of people from sports to their products.
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, when ads are shown during sporting events, they may dampen the spirit and enthusiasm of the spectators.
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it may not arouse
real sports spirit
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the real sports spirit
in people. In conclusion, even though product adverts distract viewers of sports competitions to a small extent, sports events are promoted to a great extent during these competitions which are sponsored by big multinational firms. So it is good that sports events are sponsored by big organizations.
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