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A country's future depends on it's young people. Therefore, a country should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a saying that goes "children are the leaders of tomorrow"
Hence
, countries are admonished to invest greatly in the young. In my opinion, I strongly agree with having to impact the younger generation and
this
 essay will
further
 discuss how
this
 act can make a nation internationally recognised and how people can become better leaders in the years to come.
Firstly
, when the young are being invested into, they enable the country to be globally recognised.
This
 can be explained in the sense that young adults who have undergone thorough grooming, through education, moral values as well as cultural ethics are enabled to build their own brands, which could be in the form of gadgets, textiles or even edibles.
Therefore
, creating a global identification for the nation as these goods is exported to other countries for use worldwide.
For instance
, my uncle was placed on scholarship from primary school through tertiary institution by the state government. He is a proud owner of several multinational companies today.
This
 worldwide recognition,
consequently
, encourages the nation's economy to experience a significant increase.
Also
, investing in the younger generation by the country motivates youths to be responsible leaders.
This
 is due to the fact that, being a leader comes with a lot of responsibilities.
For example
, in Nigeria, all university graduates are mandated to go through a compulsory one year of national service, where every individual is posted outside the confines of their homes and comforts to acquire skills and learn the cultural values of other tribes.
This
 platform creates a form of awareness and respect within the individual.
Therefore
, allowing them to grasp the obligation
that is
 attached to being a responsible leader later in life. To sum up, after analysing the points stated, it is clear that the impact of a country on the young adult paves way to becoming responsible elders and gives global recognition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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