Some people believe that education success mostly depends on teachers. Others however say that it depends more on the attitude of student and their willingness to study. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Even though many argued that educational achievements depends more in the attitude of student and their
willingness
to study, no one can deny that for the academic
success
of the student will
depends
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depend
on
teacher
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the teacher
. In my point of view
both
factors are
interelated
reciprocally connected
interrelated
interrelate
interacted
with each other.
This
essay will discuss
both
views and my own opinion.
To begin
with, that the teachers are impacting on
student's educational goal achievement
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the student's educational goal achievement
by teaching and guiding them properly towards the achievement. Teachers can motivate
child
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a child
the child
children
as well as they can clearly identify strengths and weaknesses of the
child
. Through
this
they would be able to correct the weakness of the
child
and to lead them for their academic achievements.
On the other hand
,
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even
though how much the
teacher
teach and motivate the students, they would not be able to achieve higher educational
success
unless they have
willingness
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willed
and positive attitudes towards the
education
. Even though how much the
teacher
is qualified it will not affect for
success
of
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on
academic performance if,
willingness
is not there and on the other
way
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way, although
although
how much
child
is willing and have positive attitudes towards
education
does not make
achivement
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the achievement
achievement
if,
teacher
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the teacher
a teacher
is not qualified.
Therefore in
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Therefore, in
my opinion,
both
factors are inextricably intertwined with the
success
of
child's
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the child's education
a child's education
education
. The
teacher
should be well qualified and trained person to understand
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clouds
strengths and weaknesses as well as there should be
willingness
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a willingness
and attitude towards the study within the
child
for higher educational achievements. In conclusion, even many argued that the academic achievements depend on
teacher
while others believe it is depend on
child's
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the child's willingness
a child's willingness
willingness
and attitude, from my point of view I believe
both
quality
teacher
and
child
's attitudes towards the
education
are inextricably intertwined.

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