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Old Mobile phones vs the New Mobile phones - Features and comparison

#phones #features #comparison
Mobile phones have come of age both as a piece of technology and a gadget everyone needs these days. Nowadays, you can simply go to the market and choose a phone according to your budget and style. Almost all the new phones have a full
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
 display, internet connectivity and cameras with video making capabilities. All
this
, in a much
lighter
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Lighter
 and sleeker avatar as compared to their predecessors. The 1st gen mobile
phones though
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phones, though
 had basic common features with the modern ones like earphones, battery
etc
, they were quite different when it came to their overall weight and display type which was black and white. Despite these basic features these phones were considered a luxury due to their rarity and hefty price tags. Thanks to the advancement of tech that these devices are much more affordable and available now and the rising demand only guarantees a constant and rapid growth in
this
 technology and space.

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