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Libraries should be shut down as better alternatives are available. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #alternatives
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In 21st century science and technology have developed in a tremendous way where there are many sources like internet and computers are available for retrieving latest and updated
information
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Therefore many
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Therefore, many
, people argue that libraries should be shut down as there are many technological advanced platforms which provides better services than libraries.
This
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 essay will discuss on my point of view for the given statement.
To begin
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 with, libraries are old fashion of getting
information
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 as we are living in a technologically advanced era.
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 to that libraries require
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lot
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lots
 of space, many man power and
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lot
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a lot
 of
recourses
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recourse
 to maintain and to upgrade those. As an
example it
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example, it
 requires
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lot
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lots
 of space to arrange books and there should be
different shelf
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a different shelf
 according to a systematic categorization of books, which utilize
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lot
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lots
 of
time
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 to find the book that you are interested
on
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in
 out of the shelf.
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Furthermore people
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Furthermore, people
 have to visit by themselves to get the service of a
library
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 and as we are living in fast paced
community we
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community, we
 try to value the little spare
time
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 we have rather
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scattered
scattering
 it into
time
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 consuming tasks like visiting to a
library
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. On the flip side there are
wide variety
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a wide variety
 of resources to get the book or the
information
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 rather than trying for the common traditional method which is more flexible and cost effective. Among these
resources internet
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resources, internet
, e-journal and online shopping are more famous among
people
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the people
. The advantages of other alternatives
are outweigh
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outweigh
 the advantages of using a traditional
library
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. Use of
internet
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the internet
 or an e-journal to get knowledge and
information
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is
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are
 more reliable that using a printed book from a
library
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 because there are many advantages of it
;
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;
time
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 saving, quick and easy access
of
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to
 reliable
information
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, can receive updated knowledge by just a click of a button are some of those. In conclusion, many majority of people believe as there are many reliable sources and exceptional ways to receive knowledge and
information
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 rather than getting those from a
library
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 where most of the published
information
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 are
out dated
old; no longer valid or fashionable
outdated
 due to poor update of
information
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. By considering all the pros and cons of
this
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 statement I strongly believe that rather than libraries there are many alternative ways to receive reliable data in more sophisticate and accurate manner.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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