Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being benefical, this is a danger to our societies. What are your views?

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one & half decades, the technologies get modernized in a very fast way, in communication and electronics, there is an invention in each three and a half seconds. It is really true that obtaining the new technologies is essential for the
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having a dark part that might cause
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of technology management systems should structure the overall development of
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with a correct and flexible channel. Many of the industries (Like automobile, huge machineries, earth movers, etc.)
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Process change is actually leading to reduce the human intervention in any of the business value chain
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is creating the difference of wealth between classes of people in a country or society, ultimately hampering the
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of information & communication technologies is affecting the data privacy for individuals and organisation level,
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is a huge threat for us & a point to think about for our future. At the end of the discussion, I believe we can not alternate our technologies from our life, as for
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we can communicate with our peers, friends, families from thousands of miles away, we can see them through new
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of internet facilities.
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the new
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of data science is helping various industries to focus more on the market and customer centric, it is
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profitable and adding more value not only to the business but
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to the society.
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, beyond of all argument against technology modernization, we need the technology to develop ourselves.
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