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The diagram below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location .summerise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagram below show the design for a wave energy machine and its location .summerise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures and make comparisons where relevent.
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This
 diagram describes the structure how to work wave
energy
machine
 and what is the perfect
location
 of the
machine
. In
this
design
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,design
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waves
 are used to produce the
electrocity
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electricity
.
Firstly
, I explain the design of
wave
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a wave
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energy
machine
 that has two chambers from which one chamber is related to the
waves
 from
sea
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the sea
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 and another chamber is connected to the turbines and generator.As
fas
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far
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 as,when
waves
 and
water
 levels air flow pass through the canal to
rhe
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the
 other chamber and by that,turbines rotate
voluntary
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voluntarily
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.
In
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I
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 say way ,air flow from outside s
pass
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passes
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 inside the
chamberthen
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chamber then
chamber than
 the turbine
rotate
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rotates
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also
after
this
 process the generator would produce
electrocity
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electricity
 as depend on the power of
air flow
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airflow
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. The
second
 diagram shows the suitable
location
 of
wave
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the wave
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energy
machine
.there are two
location
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locations
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 in
this
 structure .one
location
 is deep-sea
water
 and
second
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the second
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 is mid-sea
water
.
In deep-sea
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Deep-sea
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water
 has been too expensive because
hare
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the hare
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 is larger
waves
 are used to produce higher power of
energy
.
on the other hand
,
Mid -sea
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Midsea
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water
 might less produce
energy
as
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apply
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copared
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compared
 to
the
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apply
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deep-sea
water
 because
which
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it
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 may get only smaller
waves
 .
However
,
cost
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the cost
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 of installation is low in comparison to
yhe
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the
 larger
waves
energy
machine
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, machine, location, waves, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 9 times.
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