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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large extended family group. Is this a positive or negative trend.

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Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
in many countries, individuals in countries either live alone or in small family units, as compare to
large extended family group
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the large extended family group
. In my opinion,
this
 trend could have both positive and negative effects that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will examine in
this
 essay. On the one hand, people living in a small family or living alone have several advantages.
Majority
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The majority
 of people are
for
to a considerable degree; very much
far
 from their family as people have to go many countries for work and staying there for years. In many nations people long tour for
do
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doing
 work.
Furthermore
, many people like to stay alone
from
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with
 their family.
This
 is because they fight with parents and go
to
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on
 long trips in countries so they are staying alone.
For example
, with
this
 gap
generation
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generational
 low. Many parents
alone
with a forward motion
along
 with their children. Parents do not want to their alone from parents. There
are
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is
more negative impact
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a more negative impact
from
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of
 children so if people live go to other
countries so
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countries, so
 children learn
same tricks
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the same tricks
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they used pattern. To sum up, people should not live
alone to
Suggestion
alone, with
alone with
alone in
 family so they should stay together.

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