Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant laces to live and work in, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Extreme city traffic has pushed people's
life
into suffocation in terms of
leading
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the leading life
life
and job. Many urge that
this
can be controlled by completely
abanding
forsake, leave behind
abandoning
usage of private cars
,
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,
which is not the correct law to solve the huge traffic congestion in my opinion.
Although
personal cars are the major reasons
,
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,
other solutions
has
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have
to be incorporated. Own cars provide us the
convenient
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convenience
of being safe in case of emergency
,
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,
it may be towards health
,
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,
attending a
death funeral
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death, funeral
or call from school about our kids and so on.
For instance
, if there is a situation of going to hospital because of cardiac arrest
,
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,
it is always a better option to use our owned cars rather than waiting for public transport like buses or cabs
,
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,
which is much time consuming.
This
may not put us into grief of loosing a
life
. Another reason being the comfort and luxury it provides. It makes us feel
confortable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
to go outside with our own family
,
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,
spending a lot of time without hurry
,
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,
use the clock to our
convenient
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convenience
. Especially
,
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,
family
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the family
families
having
small baby
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a small baby
are
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is
in need of
four wheeler
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a four wheeler
,
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,
which makes us to handle the situation easily. To conclude, rather than putting a
fullstop
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full stop
to private cars
,
Accept space
,
other remedies should be enforced because
majority
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the majority
of the humans will be dependent for urgent requirement as well as for comfort
life
.
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