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Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and world cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. How far do you agree with this view?

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Impacts and costs of international sporting events are quite controversial in the present
time
. Some of the schools are focusing on the benefits of holding international sports events while the opposite school is of the view that
this
 is a
waste
 of
time
, funds and effort.
This
 essay delves with the viewpoint before it closes the argument.
Firstly
, international sporting events helps to build some special relations between the hostile countries.
For instance
, the relationship between India and Pakistan is not so friendly and they have disputes on many issues. But the disputes are overlooked on the playground. When the teams participate in cricket, the relationships among the players are not hostile. They are cooperative and exercise the best friendly attitude with each other. If it continues, it is expected that the cold relations between the two countries will turn warmer some day.
Moreover
,
such
 events bring foreign revenue, inspire sports lovers to take part in outdoor games and promote a healthy lifestyle. But
on the contrary
, the disadvantages are
also
 acknowledged. When an international and exciting sports competition is arranged, people want to watch those events – some prefer to watch live in the playground while many like to watch on television sitting at home. To enjoy a high voltage cricket match or exciting Olympic events, people need to
waste
 their valuable times both day and night. A hardcore cricket fan may bunk office, school or may make late rising early
next
 morning for sleeping at late night. Thereby, in a greater consideration,
this
 is a
waste
 of
time
, effort and money for the ordinary people. On top of that, hosting those events requires a huge sum of money and efforts. To finish the argument, I would like to say that, though arranging big events is costly, they have many advantages. They promote friendly relationship, entertain people, promote tourism and inspire young people to participate more in sports.
This
 is why I disagree with the view that big sporting events are an enormous
waste
 of fund,
time
 and effort.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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