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Nowadays larger distances are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some consider it to be a negative development, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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in
Suggestion
In
 recent times a significant number of people travel long
distance
 to reach the workplace to study
this
 generally happens on a daily
basis I
Accept comma addition
basis, I
 firmly believe that
this
 is a negative development there are various reasons in favour of my opinion which I will explain the following essay.
there
Suggestion
There
 are both merits as well as demerits when it comes to
this
 issue the positive impact of travelling a long
distance
 is that people can learn about their surroundings and many other things that can
also
 get an idea about the transportation system of their country
moreover
 they learn how to become independent and start value
time
 they
also
 learn about the importance of being punctual. There are negative repercussions when speaking about
this concern it
Suggestion
this concern, it
 takes a long period of
time
 for people to travel a larger
distance
 to reach their destination.
Thus
, travelling a large
distance
 leads to wastage of
time
 travelling along
distance
also
 implies that only certain areas of the economy have been developed.
schools
Suggestion
Schools
 and IT firms are located only in well developed regions
therefore
 people from the backward areas have to travel long
distance
 either to work or to study according to research that was conducted recently in India 60% of the people spend more than 2 hours to reach their destination. In conclusion, travelling large distances is not beneficial to students as well as employees as it results in
time
 wastage necessary actions have to be taken to reduce
this
 growing concern.
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