Some people think that the government's decision to close the land borders in order to boost local production is a great idea. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this decision? What alternative decisions could have been used to boost local production?

It is a popular opinion that the restriction of the
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borders is ingenious to boost local manufacturing. The benefits of
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policies are reasonable as
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self sufficiency
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development, moreso it
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quality,
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, it
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exportation
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of indigenous items. The demerits
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glaring and can have detrimental effects on the state’s economy.
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discuss these Pros and cons
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possible solutions
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reviving local economic activities. In the first
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, is shifted towards the patronage of local goods owing to the absence of
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imported substitutes. There is no gain
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that
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will encourage people to better appreciate these products as continuous usage improves acceptability. In the same view, constant demand
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a particular brand encourages better versions or an upgrade of the
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A typical example is the advancement of a popular Abakaliki Rice which has seen tremendous improvement in the
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century.
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, there tend to be higher export rates as organisations
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try to expand their reach and customer base thereby exploring markets beyond the shores of
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production domain.
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can be seen as some Nigerian brands like the Globacom telecom giant
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widely used in other
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African countries.
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,
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law can have negative impacts as it can hamper intercontinental and regional
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relations, many nations depend on
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mutual cooperation and coexistence to survive and prosper. There is
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a threat
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foreign investment owing to reduced entrance of businesses.
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, the currency of the country will be greatly affected as demand for local currency will fall short. In conclusion, the directives of the leaders can have positive impacts on the prosperity of the citizens, it could
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lead to dire consequences which could slow growth, drive low productivity and reduce the monetary value.
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, the leaders should consider increasing specific taxes on foreign products and services,
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waivers and support to
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businesses and
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specialized Research and development
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to foster
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advancements
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trade.

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The essay presents a clear argument for both the advantages and disadvantages of closing land borders.
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The use of examples, such as Abakaliki Rice and the Globacom telecom giant, effectively supports your points.

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