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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops.Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view.

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 as it relates to tradition.I am of the opinion that
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 will result more in growth of culture and way of life than
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.As long as people are still interested in these traditions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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