the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British students in England at a University who know to speak other languages apart from English in the
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish was the highest spoken language in both the years,
while
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the minimum speaking was German for both the years. The number of students who can speak Spanish
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30% in 2000 and has increased by 5% by 2010 and it remained the highest spoken language.
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, the combined
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of pupils who can converse in another and two other languages was 25% in 2000, which has increased by 5% in each language by 2010 with a total of 35%.
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, pupils who cannot speak anything other than English were 20% in 2000, and by 2010 the count decreased to 10%. The
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who can converse in German were only 10% in both the given years.
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, pupils who can communicate in French were 15% in 2000, which
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decreased by 5% in 2010.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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