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Nowadays, people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative trend?

These days
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 to digital information is greater than it ever was, thanks to our connection to the internet. Many
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 connectivity to keep abreast of local and global events via social media.
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 convenient for the proliferation of
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 explain my belief that it is positive
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 access to instant information. Despite
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 multiple reasons, the most obvious reason for numerous
people
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 subscribing to these channels is that they are interested in a convenient mode of communication. There is a multitude of platforms,
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 Facebook, Twitter, and LinkedIn
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 automatically populates real-time updates in
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 news feeds section.
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 subscribers can
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 their feeds, built-in artificial intelligence algorithms display breaking stories based on previous browsing history.
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 find it easier to download, subscribe and use social networks. In my viewpoint,
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 increasing trend offers a paramount amount of benefits which eclipse its drawbacks. To exemplify, the public gets to know what is happening not only in their local region but
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 in other countries instantly. In comparison to traditional newspapers (whether paper or digital) and magazines, social media networks provide better opportunities to see what friends and families are reading and liking as they share and like the articles.
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beneficial,
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 widespread approach to stay updated about news. In conclusion, the chief justification for social media being used by many
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world events is its ease of use. I believe
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 it is a positive trend
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 it is crucial to know what is happening around the globe. In future, it will expand enormously and rapidly.

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planning
Plan your essay with a clear map: begin with a short view, then tell the reasons, give one clear example, and end with a short view again.
language
content
You state a view on the topic.
evidence
You name how social media apps give fast news.
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