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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
In some parts of the world, the demand of new houses is increasing,
although
 the only free space for new constructions is the outskirts some think it is better to reserve the
countryside
. I personally believe that
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 must be used for manufacturing and agriculture. There are two
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 for the housing shortage in the modern society. The
first
 is the overpopulated city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
. People tend to live near to the essential services like schools and healthcare which are rarely found in small villages. The
second
 reason, which is somehow related to the
first
,
Accept space
,
the rapid increase in the population has created an imbalance in the residency system
.
Accept space
.
In other words
, in some towns there are more families than the numbers of buildings so
its
it is
it's
 so difficult to have a house in the city. Society can attain the most of the
countryside
. It should only be used for
farming
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farms
farm
 and cottages.
to
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To
 meet the required supply of food for both humans and livestock
.
Accept space
.
in
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In
 addition to that, the chemical industries can be located in an isolated
locations
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location
 far from the inhibitors to avoid any possible
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
.
Accept space
.
for
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For
 instance
,
Accept space
,
 oil pumps will generate a toxic emission
such
 as
smock
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a smock
smocks
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
 today's world suffer from serious housing problems.
however
Suggestion
However
, the empty lands of
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 should not be used for settlement.

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