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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?".

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Our environment has been affected by a
number
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 of o
r
of or belonging to us
our
actions and inactions, developed nations are not an exception and have equally contributed to a
number
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 of issues bothering our climate. In my o
pinion
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opinion, this
this
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 c
oncerns
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concern
can be solved by a
number
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 of ways. Undoubtedly, promoting the planting of trees would reduce the negative effects of climate change. Trees planted tend to preserve the surroundings and prevent natural disasters.
For example
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, a Vietnamese study conducted in 2005 showed that tree planting in selected communities reduced flooding experienced 5 years after b
u
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by
a significant 40%.
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urthermore continuous
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Furthermore, continuous
advocacy to the general public on the need to dispose waste appropriately and setting up penalties for defaulters would go a long way in preserving the climate. If people are encouraged to not litter around themselves and fined when they do will serve as a deterrent to those who perform
such
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 acts which will eventually prevent a resulting unhealthy environment.
This
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 move was seen to have a huge impact in C
ross river state
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the Cross river state
where, commuters who threw garbage on the streets where penalize with a sum of ten thousand n
aira
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Naira
more
or face jail time. The result revealed by a survey carried out by the environmental protection agency of t
he the
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the
state, recorded resounding success on the safety of the waterways. In conclusion,
although
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 the western society h
ave caused
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has caused
a
number
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 of complications to our habitat,
this
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 can be mitigated by discouraging the cutting down of trees as well as support good waste disposal practices while punishing those who do
otherwise
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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