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Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are lots of responsibilities that are bestowed on the authority concerning the citizens of its nations. Few individuals are opined that the executive arm of the nation is to be responsible for the welfare of the disabled, unemployed individuals and people that do not have a shelter in our society.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree that the
government
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 should take up their responsibilities as
this
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 will encourage laziness, incur more cost and makes the unemployed to stop looking for a
job
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.
Firstly
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, if the
government
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 takes care of the jobless and shelterless people,
this
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 will
further
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 encourage laziness and it will make them laid back
from
Suggestion
for
further
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 searching for jobs to
meer
come together
meet
 their needs and pay their
bilss
a statute in draft before it becomes law
bills
.
For Instance
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, According to the report that was released from
united kingdom
Suggestion
the united kingdom
, some homeless people deliberately refuse to go find the
job
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 and some after finding the
job
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, while some that finds the
job
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, refuses to pass the interview because they solely depended on
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government
Suggestion
the government
 to supply their needs while they sit back at home
claimimg
assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing
claiming
 they could not get a
job
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.
Secondly
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, For the
government
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 meeting the needs of the homeless and unemployed, it will cost the
government
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 loads of money that can be used to provide some other infrastructural facilities for the citizens. Example is the united states of America that has been spending millions of dollars on the Supplemental Nutrition Assistance Program
(
Accept space
(
SNAP
)
Accept space
)
 which is used to feed the less
priviledge
blessed with privileges
privileged
 by given them food and for some, gets
money
Suggestion
the money
instead
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 of them to go find a
job
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. Millions of Dollars can be saved if the support can be cancelled. In conclusion, there are other ways that
government
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 can meet the needs of the unemployed and homeless, but the disabled individuals
deserves
Suggestion
deserve
 more attention than the destitute on
the the
definite article
the
 streets.
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