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Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Madam, I Ms.Anugraha Shah from block-c, room no.3. I am writing to inform you that I wish to move into new accommodation as I am finding it a bit difficult to get adjusted with the current roommates. To bring
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 your notice the other 2 girls with whom I am sharing the room are very noisy, they always tend to have late-night parties with heavy music on. It makes a disturbing atmosphere during my sleep hours.
Additionally
, they have a habit of using common bathrooms for long hours, which ultimately makes me always late for the
first
 lecture. Many times, I made cordial requests,
however
, It seems they are not at all willing to maintain silence nor help me during an emergency. I request to look out
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 other option where the roommates are friendly supportive and understanding. It will help me a lot to concentrate on
studies
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 while the exams are nearby. I humbly request you to consider me on priority and find an alternative for my current stay. I look forward to hearing back from you immediately. Yours faithfully, Anugraha Shah.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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