Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia. as many as two thirds of children are now obese. schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. to what extent do you agree with thhis statement?

An obesity

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is a disease which is

continuesly

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continuously

Increasing in

childern

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children

in Australia, and 33% of

chilldren

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children

are already obese. Many people believe that

schools

are responsible

to monitor

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for monitoring

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on

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their

staudent's

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student's

students

exercise

and eating

habbits

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habits

while

others

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contradict

this

statement.

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essay will discuss why I

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firmaly

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firmly

oppose it. There are numerous reasons behind the truth that why

schools

ought not be responsible

to monitor

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for monitoring

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the student's diet and

exercise

amount, but the most persuasive one is that it is not the

role

of teachers. As teachers are there to educate them,

there

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role

is not to keep

the

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record of

exercise

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the exercise

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and eating

habbits

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habits

of the

students

in fact it is the

role

of the parents. Teachers or

schools

can only educate them about the benefits of

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exercise

and nutrition

therefore

it is the parent's duty to make their children

to

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eat healthy and

do

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exercise

.

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, the

schools

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school's

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role

is not to monitor what their

students

eat and how much

exercise

they do.

Secondly

, the

students

can feel inferior if a teacher

will ask

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them about what they have eaten in front of the class. Some

students

are very

soft hearted

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, and they feel shame when a teacher

ask

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anything personal

therefore

the chances of feeling inferior are great if a teacher

will ask

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or

guide

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them to eat less and

do

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exercise

becuase

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because

they are obese.

Study

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have shown that every year 0.5%

students

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of students

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do

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suicide

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because

of

feeling

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inferior in front

the

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of the

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class, and the percentage can increase if

schools

would

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involve

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in

this

matter.

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essay discussed the reasons why

schools

ought not to take

this

responsiblity

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responsibility

. In conclusion,

schools

can only educate

to

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students

about it,

however

, it is the

parent

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parents

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who should monitor their children's

execise

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exercise

and eating

habbits

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habits

.