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Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

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Most
researchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
researches
research
 have proven that leisure
time
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 is vital for the development of intellectual and physical abilities of children.
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, with the highly competitive education
stucture
a thing constructed; a complex entity constructed of many parts
structure
, most people argue
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time
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 as a waste. In my opinion, I believe every child
should has
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should have
 its own
time
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 to play.
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 with, adolescents need a certain
amount
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 of
time
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 to interact with the friends or do leisure
activites
any specific behavior
activities
. Each and every activity they involved in
this
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time
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 is significant for their future. Because, they are able to capture few skills for the lives during
this
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.
For instance
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, a child who plays outdoor
games improve
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games, improve
 the health and he or she would be able to learn the skills of situation handling and leadership.
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, children who would prefer to spend
time
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 with the computers learn the highly valued IT skills.
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, free
time
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 is crucial for children to gather some tools for the years to come.
On the other hand
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,
continous
continue a certain state, condition, or activity
continue
continuous
 school work and exams generate some
amount
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 of stress on the minds of these youngsters. Most parents encourage their offsprings to get more marks on the exams, which
eventully
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
 become a burden of them.
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, leisure
time
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 is
pvitol
being of crucial importance
pivotal
 for
take
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taking
 their mind off and involve in
somthing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 interesting.
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, studies have shown that most children who do not have any free
time
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 become isolated in the society and they tend to attempt
scuicide
the act of killing yourself
suicide
.
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Therefore in
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Therefore, in
 order to keep these developing minds free and
ethusiastic
having or showing great excitement and interest
enthusiastic
 for life they require some
amount
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 of free
time
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. In
concultion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
concussion
,
yougsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 today are fed up with their schools work and exams. Because of that it is important to give them some
amount
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time
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 to
relaese
release, as from one's grip
release
realise
realize
 their stress as well as learn some skills that could not be
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
thought
 at schools.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unstructured free time
  • creativity
  • mental health development
  • extracurricular activities
  • well-rounded development
  • sports
  • arts
  • social skills
  • family time
  • emotional growth
  • relationship building
  • rest and leisure
  • academic performance
  • burnout
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