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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences

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In
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During
 the Recent years, between the different countries, a
lof
(often followed by 'of') a large number or amount or extent
lot
 of people Keen
on
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to
 visit to other countries. Those people
liKe
prefer or wish to do something
like
 to learn the different
cultural
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culture
cultures
 and
reconize
accept (someone) to be what is claimed or accept his power and authority
recognize
 different things from the other countries. In my opinion, every host country should welcome cultural differences. Because the visitors
were stay
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stayed
 a short time for their journey. They will travel and shopping ‘in the Cities. Sometime, they can bring up the cultural and
enconomoic
of or relating to an economy, the system of production and management of material wealth
economic
 were
development
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developed
developing
.
Althought
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Although
, the language and the lifestyle are different, but we shall learn from their
lanuage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
. Some people cannot accept the visitors. I think they
afair
make available or accessible, provide or furnish
offer
 to
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the local customs. And
…
Accept space
…
the
people in general
they
then
 don’t the behaviour were
effect
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effected
effectively
effective
 to their countries
saft
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Saft
.
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Therefore the
Accept comma addition
Therefore, they
Therefore they
 cannot accept. The visitors might be the crime and
escept
having escaped, especially from confinement
escaped
 from their countries.
However
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, they
afaird
make available or accessible, provide or furnish
offered
afford
 the visitors whose will
destronye
do away with, cause the destruction or undoing of
destroy
 their counties. In summerise, the people.
should
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Should
 accept the host country and welcome cultural differences. They will earn a lot
for
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of
from
 other countries.
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such
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Such
 as
cultural
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culture
,
reglious
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, Knowledge, Arts
etc
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, If they can accept the other countries Visitors. They might be
benefit
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benefited
benefiting
 a lot than
they
of them or themselves
their
 needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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