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children are facing academic, social and commercial pressures.causes and solution.

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Introduction
there
Suggestion
There
 is no doubt that adolescents are having burdens
such
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 as academic, social and commercial, it is important to determine the solutions to
alliviate
provide physical relief, as from pain
alleviate
this
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 problem.
Body paragraph 1
First
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 of all,
the higher
Suggestion
the high
exectations
belief about (or mental picture of) the future
expectations
 from parents can lead the
child
Use synonyms
 to distress.
This
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 issue is
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 the world is becoming a global village with fast-paced life and parents do not want their offspring to stay behind others but sometimes results could be devastating.
For example
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, intimidation from father and mother could damage
physchology
the science of mental life
psychology
 of kids to take unfortunate steps like suicide or
crime
Suggestion
criminal
 activities. To solve
this
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 problem, parents should keep realistic expectations and should understand the capability and interests of their
child
Use synonyms
.
Body paragraph 2
As a result
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, with support and
guildlines
a light line that is used in lettering to help align the letters
guidelines
 from their parents, there will not be any academic anxiety and children can achieve greater success in his fascinated field.
Body paragraph 3
Furthermore
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, peer pressure could be a factor for
child
Use synonyms
 to have
inferiority complex
Suggestion
an inferiority complex
inferiority complexes
.
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this
Suggestion
This
 could make a kid to demand those
unaffordable
Suggestion
 or unnecessary items to their parents and
this
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 could create tension
in
Suggestion
at
 home.
For instance
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, an expensive gadget can lure a
child
Use synonyms
's
concious
intentionally conceived
conscious
 when he sees it with his friends, and would want to have it for himself but eventually it leads to strains. To ease
this
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 problem, father and mother should take pro-active way of communication and without confrontation they must make them understand the significance of money. As an outcome
,
Accept space
,
 bond of parents and children will emerge and without any
further
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 conflicts a
prospeous
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
precious
 family might be shaped.
Conclusion
In conclusion, undoubtedly
,
Accept space
,
 children nowadays feeling
unneccessary
not necessary
unnecessary
 stress and to make them feel easy, it is parents'
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 to take necessary steps
such
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 as mentioned above.

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