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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Hosting an international sporting
event is always
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event has always been
event has been always
 a
pride
feeling self-respect or pleasure in something by which you measure your self-worth; or being a reason for pride
proud
 moment for every
country
. Some people think that having a multinational sport competition has its own benefit, while some say it has
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
 on the
country
. In my opinion, organizing
a
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an
 intercontinental
event
 bring more money and development
to
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in
 a
country
.
This
 essay will discuss both the view and will provide
reason
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reasons
 why
international sporting
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the international sporting event
an international sporting event
event
 has its own profits It is widely believed that
multinational gaming
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the multinational gaming event
event
are
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is
 beneficial to the economies of developing countries.
Such
 events bring sport lover's, famous celebrities and their fan's to the host nation which increase tourism.
For example
 hosting a sporting
event
such
 as
olympics
the modern revival of the ancient games held once every 4 years in a selected country
Olympics
 attracts investment and creates
job
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jobs
. Many people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
 that gaming competition has more negative effect on the
country
 because
such
 events causes expenditure of the money affecting the countries GDP.
Country
 need to invest
heavly
to a considerable degree
heavily
 in infrastructure.
This
 can be seen from the example of
bangladesh
a Muslim republic in southern Asia bordered by India to the north and west and east and the Bay of Bengal to the south; formerly part of India and then part of Pakistan; it achieved independence in 1971
Bangladesh
 which held
common wealth
the official name of some states in the United States (Massachusetts and Pennsylvania and Virginia and Kentucky) and associated territories (Puerto Rico)
commonwealth
 games in 2010, which almost
brough
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
thier
of them or themselves
their
 GDP
to
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in
 half. In conclusion, organizing a Sports
event
 can have
it
it is
it's
 own positive and negative effect. The countries should try to organize
such
event
 as it is
pride
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the pride
a pride
for
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of
 its citizens to see their motherland on
global scale
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a global scale
the global scale
.
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