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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The cars are used many people around the
world
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. They are different
company
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's are produced by the different models. Some
company
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's are produced by small amount of
price
a feeling of self-respect and personal worth
pride
 and some
company
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's are produced by
large amount
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the large amount
a large amount
 of
price
a feeling of self-respect and personal worth
pride
. The
car
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's are normally used and some other purpose used many people around the
world
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. The
company
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's are manufacturing different
models
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models, then
then
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 people attracted more in the
world
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. The
first
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car
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 appeared on British roads in 1888. The
car
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's are motivated in
company
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's by the different model in British country. The
car
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's
are appeared
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appear
 on British roads by the
year
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 1888.
This
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 type of
car
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's introduced by the British
company
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's in British country. The
car
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 is running on the
road but
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road, but
 people's are not attracted by the
car
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's. Some
year
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's are running into the roads.
After
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Over
 long time people's are attracted by
car
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's. The
car
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's used many people's now a day's. By the
year
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 2000 there may be as many as 29
millions
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million
 vehicles on British roads. The
car
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 is most costly
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 because many people's buy a
car
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 by new model's in
modern era
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the modern era
. The
car
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's
company
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's are more around the
world
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. The British road's are fully vehicles by the
year
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 2000. Many of the people's are mostly used by a
car
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's in now a day's. The 29
millions
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million
 of vehicles used by the British road's by the
year
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 2000. The Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control
car
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 ownership and use. The transport by one place to another place by
used
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using
 the vehicles. They should be encouraged by the Alternative forms. Some rule's and laws introduced to control
car
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 ownership and use. These are all should be fallow international laws by using
car
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's. The
car
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's are used many people's around the
world
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, So we can improve their driving skills and some international laws are must be fallow. The growth rate of
car
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's must be
increase
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increased
 by the
company
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. The forms must be encouraged by the owner of the
car
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's. If you
are use
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are using
use
have used
 the
car
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's
then
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 must be careful on the roads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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