Some people claim that public museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #museums #art #galleries #objects #works #computer

Quite a number of persons

says

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that Art Galleries and Public Museums can be shut down

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Since we can simulate these materials into Electronic Objects.In my opinion, I disagree with

this

statement, But agree to some extent which I

would

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explain

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in the following paragraph. First of all, Art in the Society has a significant value to it.Not every person

appreciate

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the work

goes

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into it, And I believe it has a life.

Similarly

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Artefacts placed in Museum exhibits,

historic

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of historic

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importance.When we visit in person and have a look at

this

stuff, We would go back to their ages.

This

doesn't happen when we virtually

sees

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it in a system.

For example

: If The Monalisa painting or The Mummy is made into an Image, Would

public

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agree to view it only online and not at the Exhibition?

However

There

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are some positive features in converting the crafts into digital images as

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can be preserved for centuries without any damage or alteration to the original copy.Even we can create a 3D replica of it and can be used for education and research

purpose

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, But when compared to the fact that

does

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it gives

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fulfilment, is really a question.It gives an immense pleasure when we

are visiting

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rooms which

has

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masterpiece

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masterpieces

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exhibited and spend time on

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them

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rather than viewing

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them

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digital devices.

To conclude

, I would

reiterate

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agree

upon

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some extent

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with

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the statement, But I

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strongly

disagreeing

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with the thought of a few people who would like to have

age old

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specimens and crafts as a virtual image rather than having

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them

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the

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Public exhibitions.

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

268 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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