Some people claim that public museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Quite a number of persons
says
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say

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that Art Galleries and Public Museums can be shut down
,
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apply

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Since we can simulate these materials into Electronic Objects.In my opinion, I disagree with
this
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statement, But agree to some extent which I
would
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will

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explain
it
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apply

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in the following paragraph. First of all, Art in the Society has a significant value to it.Not every person
appreciate
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appreciates

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the work
goes
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that goes

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into it, And I believe it has a life.
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Similarly
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Similarly,

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Artefacts placed in Museum exhibits,
historic
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of historic

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importance.When we visit in person and have a look at
this
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stuff, We would go back to their ages.
This
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doesn't happen when we virtually
sees
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see

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it in a system.
For example
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public
Correct article usage
the public

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agree to view it only online and not at the Exhibition?
However
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,
There
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there

There does not appear to be a proper noun. Consider lowercasing it.

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are some positive features in converting the crafts into digital images as
it
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they

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can be preserved for centuries without any damage or alteration to the original copy.Even we can create a 3D replica of it and can be used for education and research
purpose
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purposes

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, But when compared to the fact that
does
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb does appears to be unnecessary here.

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it gives
a
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apply

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fulfilment, is really a question.It gives an immense pleasure when we
are visiting
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visit

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rooms which
has
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have

The singular verb has does not appear to agree with the plural subject rooms. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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masterpiece
Fix the agreement mistake
masterpieces

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exhibited and spend time on
it
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them

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rather than viewing
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them

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in
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on

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digital devices.
To conclude
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, I would
reiterate
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apply

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agree
upon
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to

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some extent
to
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with

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the statement, But I
am
Verb problem
apply

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strongly
disagreeing
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disagree

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with the thought of a few people who would like to have
age old
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age-old

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specimens and crafts as a virtual image rather than having
it
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them

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at
the
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apply

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Public exhibitions.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
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