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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. what can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

#countries #dangers
Environmental issues have been linked to activities by industrialized countries which have been hazardous to human existence.The peril of
this
 climate change can be lessen by educating the populace and strict
government
policy
 which will benefit all. Generally, having full knowledge and understanding by educating the populace of the present hazards caused by human activities which have affected the atmospheric condition.An awareness that
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there is depletion of ozone layers through social media like
facebook
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Facebook
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Instagram
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WhatsApp and the likes will inform people about the activities that are of benefit and those that are dangerous to the environment.
Moreover
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there should be
day
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a day
 to day seminal starting from the primaries showing that children are not left out. Programmes involving the enhancement of green life should be encouraged for both educated and non educated. As they say
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information is power.
Furthermore
,
government
policy
 on human pursuit which affect
the green
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greener
 life will do go. Currently the unlawful act of deforestation is very alarming which can be curbed if
government
 can be proactive in their
policy
 making
also
afforestation
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afforested
 like planting of trees goes a long way.
Consisquently
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Consequently
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there should law against use age of fairly used tires
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burning of recyclable materials
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use age of
regular light bulb
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a regular light bulb
regular light bulbs
 and the likes. Most of the so called fairly used tires are
expired which
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expired, which
 contribute to
this
 effect.
Compact fluorescent light bulb
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The compact fluorescent light bulb
 should be strictly encouraged
for
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to
 use.Recent research on electricity in Nigeria shows that compact fluorescent light bulb reduces 150 pounds of carbon dioxide a year.
This
 will do a lot to our environment if
government
 with the help of
United Nations
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the United Nations
to
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with
 emphasis
this
 habit in communities. In conclusion, education is power it makes the unknown to be known and solutions guided with good
policy
 ignorant is a disease in which education is the cure.
Similarly
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Similarly, policy
policy
.By
this
, the world will be a beautiful place to live.

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