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Question: Do you agree or disagree that in the near future the role of teachers will be taken by technology?

#future #role #teachers #technology
In
this
 present generation, advancement in computer know how as overpowered manual education. The modern day world is presently making use of robotics and other technological device
instead
 of man made efforts because they are reliable.
This
 is because a
ssignment
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the assignment
assignments
are achieved faster with a good result and should be welcomed.
Firstly
, when machines are used in learning in schools there are more chances that any task
that is
 given to student’s will be fully and completely treated within a stipulated time frame.
For e
xample some
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example, some
students who used calculators during an exam competition with other schools scored higher than t
here
of them or themselves
their
competitors who didn’t, and were immediately given scholarships thereby saving cost of paying fees.
This
 is because calculators can derive answers to q
uestion
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questions
within the shortest space of time.
Therefore
, gadgets should be encouraged for
this
 purpose.
Secondly
, the use of robots should be encouraged because it h
elp
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helps
to give a
ccurate result
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an accurate result
accurate results
to task in f
ew minutes.
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a few minutes
Thus
, machines provide solutions to problems with ease, the use of d
evice
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the device
should be considered a great move in the society.
For e
xample in
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example, in
s
outh
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South
Africa robots are used as h
ouse maid,
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a house maid
house maids
this
 is because they deliver excellent domestic services
.
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.
Therefore
 machines is a
dviced
having the benefit of careful prior consideration or counsel
advised
advice
for b
etter and accurate result
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better and accurate results
 In conclusion, even though m
an maid
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man, maid
knowledge as b
een
the state or fact of existing
being
put to work, there w
as
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were
no reasonable achievements seen in the society, as it were, machines have proven without any reasonable doubts to be reliable, accurate and fast
Therefore
 gadgets is considered acceptable to prevail in the modern world, so that task will be a
ctualize
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actualized
within the shortest space of time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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