Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In the modern days, entertaining industry is
gained
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gaining
more and
more intention
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more intently
from the society more than
ever
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ever, thus
thus
a lot of famous people
such
as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid with high salaries.
This
raised a concern that whether entertainers should not be paid too high wages and spend
those
denotes a person or thing
this
money
on other things or else.
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essay will discuss about
this
content. Entertainers are those who have skills and talents to entertain other people through TV programs or internet. Since more and more people nowadays have access to the social media, many entertainment shows can draw a lot of audience and gain massive profits.
This
leads to the reason why many famous people can have
such
high salaries as long as their performance is good enough. Some entertainers can’t use all of their
money
so they use it to fund other charities to help orphans, homeless, cancer patient and elderly in nursing home…
However
, not all famous people can act like that. Some of them make a lot of scandal which involving in spending
money
into bad things. So,
although
entertainments
plays
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play
an important
roles
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role
in the society since they brings joy and fun to tons of people, not all of them should be paid with equally high wages. If they
have make
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have made
good shows and have a good life, they
deserves
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deserve
a good amount of
money
and if they don’t, the
money
that used to pay for them should be cut off and use on something else
that
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that's
worth spending,
such
as other careers. Many jobs nowadays have much less of what they should deserve,
such
as teaching – a very important job but
have
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has
such
low salaries. In short, entertainers or famous people like film stars, pop musicians should be paid depending on their morality, and they shouldn’t gain more
money
than they actually need so that other careers
such
as teaching can have a better
wages
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wage
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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