It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develop. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

These days, the practice of conventional cultures
are now becoming
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is now becoming
a thing of the past. It is unavoidable that conventional cultures will go into extinction as technical knowledge evolve.
Therefore
,
technology
and traditional cultures are a whale of
difference
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a difference
. In my opinion, I strongly agree owing to the fact that cultures relating to history have now been taken over with the advent of
technology
.
To begin
with, traditional
culture
bring
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brings
values and forms a greater part norms of the society in the olden days.
People
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A people
belonging to a particular
culture
are guided by these values. With the advent of
technology
, conventional cultures of various ethnic groups are gradually going
to
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into
a decline.
This
is because more and more people are now engrossed and fascinated by technological opportunities relating to internet communications, forex trading and as
such
forget the values, norms and
culture
of the
land
.
For instance
, in the olden days, the
culture
of the Yoruba
land
in Nigeria is that parents choose a partner for their children.
In other words
, a man who seeks to marry a daughter of a family has to see the parents
first
before meeting her. But what is obtainable nowadays with the emergence of
technology
can be seen from the angle of internet love and
hook-ups
a device providing a connection between a power source and a user
hookups
hookups'
as a result
, the
culture
of the
land
is gradually going into extinction. Another point to consider, is the values placed on history in time past.
Everyone including
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Everyone, including
the
least
immediately past
last
list
of the family knows the praise poetry of their
lineage but
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lineage, but
today, children are more interested in computers and various electronic gadgets.
Furthermore
, History which used to be a major part of the school curriculum now has been stylishly
withdrawn leaving
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withdrawn, leaving
younger generations
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the younger generations
with no idea of the
culture
of their
land
.
Finally
, traditional festivals have now become a thing of the past as most festivals are seen as archaic and outdated by the present generation. In conclusion,
although
technology
plays an important role in developing a country, the
values
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values, culture
culture
and tradition brings to the people in terms of discipline, respect and way of life makes it incomparable to
technology
and
therefore
cannot be overemphasized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In general

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