More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages?

It is believed
overtime
Suggestion
over time
that many people are choosing fast
food
instead
of
home
made meal. In my own view, there are many benefits of eating fast-
food
rather than
home
made meal. Admittedly, a major drawback of junk meal is that it makes
one
very lazy.
That is
to say that when
one
find himself or herself always eating from restaurants, the zeal and urge to cook will not be built
in
Suggestion
on
into
the person.
For example
a lady who is fond of eating junks would grow with that and end up not knowing how to prepare good
food
for her family when she is married. Another side effect of ready-made
food
is that it damages the human body. Consuming Fast
food
makes it difficult to control the sugar, salt and fat level in the body. And when
this
is not put into consideration, it brings about sickness
such
as cancer.
Nevertheless
, there are some benefits of ingesting fast
food
as compared to
home
made dishes.
One
of
this
is it saves
time
. Especially for
one
who is living alone.
For example
, a
splinster
an elderly unmarried woman
spinster
who closes from work can stop by a fast
food
to eat as she would be tired to cook when she gets
home
.
Hence
,
this
would save her enough
time
and
also
stress
Suggestion
the stress
of entering the kitchen to cook after a long day at work.
In addition
, ready-made meals are
also
convenient, gives value for money and reduces
food
wastage. Here, you
can i
Accept comma addition
can, I
can I
mean
one
can take his family to the canteen
and and
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
variety
Suggestion
a variety
of meals would be on the different dishes at the same
time
. And knowing the quantity of meal to be
eating
Suggestion
eaten
by each person would make the meal not the be a waste.
Thus
, giving value for the money spent on the meal. In conclusion, while some of the cons of junk foods are the
medical
Suggestion
medications
medication
side effect to the body like cancer, it's numerous benefits
such
as the
time
and stress it saves which is the
one
that is
incomparable to any of the detriments it may have.
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