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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. comics books radio television film theatre

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Nowadays there is an ever increasing percentage of lifestyle related diseases, many of them directly related to our nutritional habits.
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The rising popularity
The raising popularity
 of fast foods has been associated with health issues
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 as diabetes or increased blood pressure. There is a strong belief that it’s a responsibility of governments to propose solutions to these issues. I personally believe that it’s high time public bodies should come up with regulations that would minimise negative
phenomenons
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomena
phenomenon
 incurred by unhealthy meals widely available on the streets of our cities. In
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 essay I will try to justify my view.
First
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 and foremost a junk food is relatively affordable. With prices of healthy ingredients
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 as fresh vegetables, it becomes the economical choice of less wealthy to eat ready-made street meals. Introducing
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 a fiscal policy that would encourage disadvantaged social groups to make better nutritional choices might have beneficial long term effects.
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, we have to take
in
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into
 the account that that large restaurant
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chain
take
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takes
 advantage of the scale and being able to mass produce their meals. It makes it relatively difficult to be able to compete with
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 organisations for retailers whose main merit is quality. Some may argue that imposing taxes on something so essential as food products might be excessive
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 in the free market,
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however I
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however, I
 think that prospects the overall future condition of our society make
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 a move necessary.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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