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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The
technology
 used to store, retrieve and transmit data or
information
 using computer systems and networks is called
Information
Technology
. The
information
technology
 is not only makes our work quick and
easy but
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easy, but
also
 save much time.
Therefore
, I
am strongly agree
Suggestion
strongly agree
 that the benefits of
information
technology
 are more significant than its drawbacks. (54) We had seen in the past that people always move from one place to another in order to exchange
information
 or data. There was no concept of transferring data online until the invention of computer and internet.
Thus
,
information
 handling was a big problem for people in the past. (49) Presently, the
information
technology
 is revolutionizing the entire world around us. It is not only changing our lives from home to work
place but
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place, but
also
 providing us better opportunities during leisure time.
For example
, a pocket size cell phone always keeps you in touch with your family and friends.
Similarly
, the
information
 we received through electronic media is actually possible due to the blessing of
information
technology
.
Although
, the use of cell phone in excess or watching T.V.
for
Suggestion
For
 longer time is dangerous to our health,
however
, its advantages are far greater than its disadvantages. (95) The recent development in
information
technology
 has transformed the whole world into
global village
Suggestion
a global village
 in which everyone is able to send and receive
information
 from far end. It has
also
 enabled us to collect
information
 even from other planets.
Hence
, if the doors of
information
technology
 keep on opening,
then
 we shall soon be able to step into a digital world. (61)
Thus
,
information
technology
 is altering every aspect of our life and the benefits of
this
 development are undeniable. (18)
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