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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the layout of a
wave-energy
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 machine and possible options for its Installation. (15) The design of the
wave-energy
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 machine consists of two chambers. The lower
chamber
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 is placed
under water
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 and has a large hole on one side. The upper
chamber
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 has two turbines located inside the
chamber
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 and an electric generator is installed on the outside. When water
waves
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 enter the lower
chamber
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, it pushes the
air
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 towards
upper
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chamber
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.
This
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air
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 is used to drive the two turbines which
then
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 run the
electric
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 generated attached
with
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 them. The
air
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 leaves the design system through
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the top
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top
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 end. When the
waves
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 leave the system, more
air
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 is pulled inside from
top
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, and the cycle is repeated.
On the other hand
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, if
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wave-energy
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a wave-energy
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 setup is mounted in
deep
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a deep
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 sea where the water
waves
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 are large, it generates high output but it is expensive.
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,
reverse
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 is true when installed in a shallow sea where the
waves
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 are small. (144)
Thus
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,
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wave-energy
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the wave-energy
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 machine has a simple working principle and is possible to install
it
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apply
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at
low
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a low
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 cost. (17)
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave-energy, chamber, waves, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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