The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the proportions of major problems faced by the residents of seven different cities
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United
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Kingdom in 2008, divided into three categories. (25)
Overall
, the complaints registered against health services and Education were the highest in numbers. In Belfast and Cardiff,
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of the issues reported were related to health services, 59% and 57% respectively.
This
figure was slightly low in Birmingham,
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%. For the rest four cities (Newcastle, Manchester and Glasgow), health complaints were reported
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50%. The problems concerning education and training were reported in the highest percentage, 53%, in both Glasgow and London, and it was 52% in both Belfast and Birmingham.
However
, the lowest educational issues were reported in Manchester, only 45%. For air pollution, the proportion of problems reported steadily increased from 5% in Newcastle to 12% in Cardiff.
Then
this
figure rose dramatically to 16% for Manchester before reverting back to 9% and 13% for Glasgow and London respectively. (132)
Thus
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air pollution complaints were reported in all
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seven cities of
UK
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the UK
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in 2008.(17)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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