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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart compares the expenditure on different
consumer
 products by the people of four European countries. (17)
Overall
, Britain spent the highest
amount
 and Germany spent the lowest
amount
 on
consumer
 goods. In comparison, English people spent 170
thousand
 pound sterling
for
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 photographic films which is the highest
amount
 spent on any
consumer
 item. The British
also
 spent more money than any other nation
in
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 purchasing Toys, CDs and Perfumes.
However
, their spending on Tennis racquets and Personal Stereos is relatively low, only 155
thousand
. The French
also
 consumed the maximum
amount
, 165 pounds,
on
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 Photographic Film. Their purchasing is almost identical for Toys and CDs, but they spent less than 150
thousand
 on remaining
consumer
 goods. Italian citizens spent 150
thousand
 on personal stereos and CDs.
This
 figure is five
thousand
 more for photographic films, perfumes and Tennis racquets, and around eight
thousand
 more for toys respectively.
Finally
, the Germans spent
the
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 fewer
amount
in
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 all
consumer
 items and their average spending is about 150
thousand
. (150)
Thus
, there are significant differences in spending habits within Europe. (10)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, amount, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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