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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart compares the expenditure on different
consumer
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 products by the people of four European countries. (17)
Overall
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, Britain spent the highest
amount
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 and Germany spent the lowest
amount
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 on
consumer
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 goods. In comparison, English people spent 170
thousand
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 pound sterling
for
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 photographic films which is the highest
amount
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 spent on any
consumer
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 item. The British
also
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 spent more money than any other nation
in
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 purchasing Toys, CDs and Perfumes.
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, their spending on Tennis racquets and Personal Stereos is relatively low, only 155
thousand
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. The French
also
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 consumed the maximum
amount
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, 165 pounds,
on
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 Photographic Film. Their purchasing is almost identical for Toys and CDs, but they spent less than 150
thousand
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 on remaining
consumer
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 goods. Italian citizens spent 150
thousand
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 on personal stereos and CDs.
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 figure is five
thousand
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 more for photographic films, perfumes and Tennis racquets, and around eight
thousand
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 more for toys respectively.
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, the Germans spent
the
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 fewer
amount
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in
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 all
consumer
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 items and their average spending is about 150
thousand
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. (150)
Thus
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, there are significant differences in spending habits within Europe. (10)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, amount, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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