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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that every country must have a free health service for the w
ellbeing
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well being
of its citizens. While there are many benefits to it, there are
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 some drawbacks to consider. I completely agree that every country should have a free medical service for its citizens. Health is very important in today’s world. With the lifestyle people are living nowadays, it is necessary to take care of one’s health. Eating habits now are l
ot
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a lot
more different than in the past. People mostly tend to eat outside/ junk food more often. While everyone in the house is working, home cooking now becomes a task to perform. Governments should come up with an annual free medical checkup for everyone including infants and senior citizens.
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, there are a few lower middle class families, who cannot afford a particular treatment due to the costs associated with it.
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 people prefer not being hospitalized rather than spending a huge amount of money on treatments and hospital bills.
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, it is very important for the Government to take necessary measures in
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 cases. Governments should come up with hospitals that give a free treatment for patients specially those who cannot afford them. To sum up, while there are some drawbacks to it like increase in population would make it difficult to provide good services in Government Hospitals,
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 services would be availed by people who would not be paying taxes, while people paying taxes, would not benefit b
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from
it. I personally feel that G
overnment
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the Government
should have a
nnual health check
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annual health checks
an annual health check
up programmes and free medical service camps for its citizens.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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