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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people
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People should take part in the museums, because museums are sources of culture. In si
pe o
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Sipe
shape
f the fact that multiple museums re
quires a
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require
 pay for entrance, some museums do not want
money
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. Going to the museum can be useful to people to in
rease t
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
heir we
ltanschauung,
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Weltanschauung
witnessing
and it can be a good idea which re
quiering a
require as useful, just, or proper
requiring
 payment to pay the costs of museums. There are some reasons about the advantages of charging one of which can be collected
money
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 us
e t
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used
o pay for the expenses of museums. Many cultural monuments are preserved in museums constantly since past from now, and organizing all of these probably need a lot of
money
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. All around the world, a lot of museums require charging to pay the expenses of museums. If the museums had not wanted
money
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 to
a
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for
dmission, their financial situation could have worsened after a while, and
this
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 could
also
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 lead to
deprive u
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to depriving
s from museums.
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, all museums require payment in France for these causes. In co
nclusing,
occurring at or forming an end or termination
concluding
I think that it may be beneficial for museums to charge
money
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 to improve their economical ci
rcumistances.
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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