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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stress in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to workload in
day
 to
day
 life
stress
level
 has become a serious problem. Whereas some psychologists suggest to remain free to reduce
stress
, I recommend to follow a
diet
 plan, exercise schedule and meditation to overcome the
stress
level
. Beyond doubt,
rest
Suggestion
the rest
 can decrease
stress
level
,
however
, by taking other measures we can deal with it permanently.
First
 and foremost, following a nourishing
diet
 plan can make a big change. A complete
diet
 provides various
nutrition which
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nutrition, which
help
Suggestion
helps
 human body to fight with anxiety and tensity. To quote an example, as per survey in 2018, a person eating protein rich
diet
 remains more active and happier throughout the
day
comparatively
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compared
comparable
 to those who do not eat properly.
Thus
, nutrition rich
diet
 can protect
human body
Suggestion
the human body
 from
stress
 related problems. Physical activity is another effective method to get to grips with tensity. All
kind
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kinds
 of
exercise including
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exercise, including
 weight training,
cardio and
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cardio, and
 playing sports increases hormone
level
 which boosts up metabolism to fight with increasing
stress
level
.
For instance
, a person performing at least an hour of physical activity in a
day
 increases hormone
level
 by
ten percent which
Suggestion
ten percent, which
 leads to maximize
level
Suggestion
the level
 of his happiness. In short, remaining physically active and taking a good sleep at night can reduce
stresses
Suggestion
stress
 to a good
level
 so people should focus on
diet
 and exercise rather than staying free. In conclusion,
although
 remaining free can help to reduce
stress
 to some extent, doing physical activity, eating healthy food and taking a good sleep is an effective way to control
stress
.
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