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Smaking children is the best form of discipline.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Parenting has become a very crucial aspect of one's life where parents need
o
in the direction of
to
 be extremely careful while handling their kids. Some people believe that corporal punishments are the best way to keep a child in the
discipline
.
This
 essay will argue why physical punishments are not the correct way to handle young children to teach
discipline
. Due to a lot of pressure at work and home, many parents lose patience and they release all their frustration on their children by smacking them. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of children behaving in a disciplined manner after getting punishments. These few instances have made many parents to agree without
reserve
Suggestion
reservation
 that they need to be very strict with their children. Despite the increasing workload or stress for parents, the idea of smacking children to keep them in control and
discipline
 is completely preposterous. Children are so innocent and pure that they do not even understand the meaning to be in
discipline
Suggestion
the discipline
. Researches have found that children who do not get any corporal punishments are more intelligent, social and do well in the future.
On the other hand
, children who have
this
 kind of environment at home of getting beaten up end up in depression or some other mental illness.
This
 essay argued that why
smacking
the act of smoking tobacco or other substances
smoking
 is not a good practice for the upbringing of the child. In my opinion, healthily dealing with children should be the topmost priority of a parent. It is absolutely imperative for the parents to understand the delicacy of the relationship between a parent and a child.

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