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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore logical for women and men to share household chores. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, women and men like to work in several countries on a regular basis. Some people believe that, daily duties in their houses should have been shared between men and women.
This
 essay will discuss, why it is the joint responsibility of for doing their household chores.
First
 of all, we are living in an era of gender equality.
In other words
, there is no gender difference between man and woman.
Consequently
, almost all countries allow ladies to do whatever the gents do. So
this
 reflects in their jobs too.
For instance
, in my country, a large proportion of the ladies are working, especially in the information or technology sector.
As a result
, they do not have enough time to do all the duties in their home. So without the joint effort, their house jobs could not completed.
Secondly
, children should have been pampered by both their father and mother. In detail, without the proper guidance and the inculcation from their parents, there is a chance of children may go astray.
This
 could adversely affect the society too. So that, both father and mother have the joint onus to rear their children to cement a good citizen.
For example
, some countries passed a law states that, both genders have the same right to their children rather than one. In conclusion, I totally agreed that all the household jobs should have been shared between husband and wife, because, man and woman have the same rights and children should imbibe their parents in order to learn good things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Household chores
  • Dual-income families
  • Work-life balance
  • Traditional gender roles
  • Division of labor
  • Egalitarian
  • Mental well-being
  • Societal attitudes
  • Efficiency
  • Domestic responsibilities
  • Cultural norms
  • Upbringing
  • Role models
  • Familial dynamics
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