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Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they sould challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that there is a huge
diffrence
the quality of being unlike or dissimilar
difference
differences
 between young and old
generation
 way of thinking and
living espicially
Accept comma addition
living, especially
living especially
living specially
 with all
chnages
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
changes
 and development that we are living in these days
thats
Suggestion
that's
 made our life easier. For some people, they believe that when
young
Suggestion
a young generation
generation
 follow the old ones, they
well
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be able to
aquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
 the experience and the wisdom from them, since
the old
Suggestion
the older
generation
 have had lived a long time.
However
, there is another group of people saying that the old
gneration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
 ideas must not be followed by
the the
definite article
the
 teenagers, because some of
the old
Suggestion
the older
 generations thoughts is not
nessecrely
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
necessarily
 right. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think that the new
generation
 should
gnerate
bring into existence
generate
thier
of them or themselves
their
tier
 ideas from daily life
experinces
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
experience
,
espicially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 since we are living in
era
Suggestion
an era
the era
that is
 totally
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 from what people used to live
for example
: 30 years back.
young
Suggestion
The younger generation
Younger generation
Younger generations
Young generation
generation
 can
also
 use seek
advise
a proposal for an appropriate course of action
advice
 from the advanced generations and use it freely.

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