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Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in need. Others however prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is undeniable that many people in the
world
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is living
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are living
 under poverty. Some people believe that it is better to care the needed one
directly whereas
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directly, whereas
 others think that funding local and
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world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
 charitable
orgranizations
a group of people who work together
organizations
organization
 are more suitable.In
this
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 essay both sides will be discussed in detail before reaching a final conclusion. People who choose to care and encourage the poor one directly believe that it is the convenient way to provide help for the right people.The most compelling reason is that
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they are more aware of the situations of the families or children from different reliable-sources and trustworthy people
,
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,
hence
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 it helps them to act immediately.
For instance
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, in social networking
sites
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Sites
 like
facebook
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Facebook
, nowadays users are sharing and posting the poor conditions of people without
home
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homes
a home
 and chronic diseases, where most of them are showing with the live videos which can reach to millions of users in
short time
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a short time
.
Majority
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The majority
 of the people are willing to support them either providing finance for home or by takeover their medical
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.
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, these actions can motivate others when respecting them in social gatherings. Despite of
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, many others think that funding for charitable organizations are
more worth
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worthier
.
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When you are helping different organizations,
it is reaching in
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it is reaching
 the hands of people from all over the
world
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,
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,
which can increase a feeling of
fullfillness
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 and
statisfaction
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
.
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Many of the organizations have their volunteers all over the
world
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 and through them we can easily contribute
for
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to
 those who needs support.
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, when earthquakes and flood adversely affect Srilanka in April 2019
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people across the globe donate to charities either in the form of food and clothes or as money to help them to rise up. To conclude, Even though donating to charity organizations is a better choice
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in my opinion backup those who needs support directly is far beneficial to avoid the time delays and to encourage others to do.

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